Librarian of Stored Knowledge (A): is the ability to near perfect recall and memorisation of knowledgeĪlternate Classes: Assassin, Saber, Caster At this level one can continue on regardless of injury, even mortal wounds, unless a inflicted with a decisive wound such as to the heart or brain. Instinct (A): is the sixth sense, either born or gained through experience and training, to be able to “feel” what is going to happen.īattle Continuation (A): is the ability to continue fighting even when injured and wounded. It is falliable and can be covered through magecraft and other means. Hunting (A): is intuition to loosely locate where and how far away the person to hunt. Here are the information for you readers and viewers. There are going to two new additonal classes in the Fifth Holy Grail War that is the Hunter and Slayer class Servants. I would need them to make my story better for everyone and more original. Review please and see any of your opinions and thoughts. Second Chapter up with the altered plotline. And in this bit:įirst Chapter completely changed and altered. #Fate stay night fanfiction full#In addition, Kiritsugu would have used a Command Seal in his very first order he knows full well that Saber desires a wish, likely having heard of her motivations from Irisviel, or just taking a logical guess that she would want to get the wish. And people talk too much, or don't act in character, like with Saber (who is female, not male, unless you're doing that purposely) questioning Kiritsugu rather than being shocked and appalled at his order. Mainly the grammar, which needs some serious improvement. That is a small number of the errors I found in the first chapter.īoth. Heck, it won't even do anything to his Command it won't strengthen it, or make it more binding, etc. He wouldn't send flood his magic circuits with prana (od and mana together is prana) to his hand, he doesn't need to do that to use the final Command Seal. If he takes even a few seconds to explain BAM! SWORD TO THE HEAD!!Īnd Kiritsugu, even after his wife's death, and learning of the corruption of the grail and the fact that his wish was impossible, was still of more than sound enough mind to not act recklessly. One very obvious one is that Gilgamesh was RIGHT THERE. SABER DOESN'T KNOW ABOUT THE GRAIL'S CORRUPTION! There are multiple possible reasons why he didn't in canon. The answer to his question is astronomically obvious. Her actions are guided by shame more so than righteousness. The Christian God, perhaps, maybe no divine being at all, but not Alaya.Īnd she never thought of her wish as "righteous" more like a way of atonement, a way to repent her mistakes. I mean, Saber MIGHT be thinking something similar, but not in such a childish manner.Īlso, Saber does not consider Alaya her "holy figure", the person she prays to, automatically thanks when something goes right, etc. The comparison with FFD is due to the former manages to get give Shirou the training without seeing any need for making him the biological son of Iri and Kiritsu. Now, if you wrote the story in first person of someone who she has fooled, then describing her a female would make sense, but not in this case.įFD is From Fake Dreams, a fanfiction where Shirou does get training for the Grail War.ĪU is Alternate Universe, which means that the initial setup of the story is different from what is canon. "Īs for Saber, everyone who knows something about Fate/Stay Night knows that she is supposed to be female, and since you use a third-person viewpoint it only makes sense to show her a such. "Kiritsugu's loyal wife, Irisviel von Einzbern was a very beautiful slender woman with long silver hair. Something like this says the same without going overboard: That is excessive, and distracting from the flow. Try at something like this instead "In a world where Kiritsugu Emiya was never cursed."įor the prose, less is more. For the summary, do not phrase it as questions.
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